It Gives You Wings
What Moved Me:
1. Great opening sentence to pull in readers
2. Good dissecting of the motto "Gives You Wings"
3. Good connections between the American society and the presence of energy drinks
4. Good personal reference
5. Easy to understand and get through
6. Broken up in a n organized manner
What Didn't Move Me:
1. Only introduced the product "Red Bull" in one sentence of the introduction
2. Some descriptions of Red Bull are very choppy
3. Incorrect in-paper siting
4. Very short paragraphs - any way to expand them?
5. No talk of the issues and problems with Red Bull - only a small section of the last paragraph
6. Is the authors final argument the consuming energy drinks are beneficial?
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