Apple's iPod: I've Got the World on a String (Shaped Earphone Chord)
What Moved Me:
1. Great title - Imaginative and makes the reader want to read on
2. Easy information to understand; right to the point
3. Good descriptions of the "old" iPod to the "new" iPod
4. Connections to other news articles ("What iPod Are You?")
5. Strong word choices
6. Interesting topic - Easy to follow
What Didn't Move Me:
1. Grammer Errors!
2. Some wordy sentences - Unnecessary
3. Essay could have been constructed better - Paragraphs were long
4. A list a facts is not so interesting to read
5. No personality - Very formal
6. No opinion of the author - Where does he or she stand?
We had almost the same likes and dislikes! I too found the content of the essay so interesting and informative, but the grammatical errors/structure made it hard to follow sometimes.
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